Hiroshi the old Hare

[Captain Stumpy]

Name: Hiroshi
Meaning: Tolerant, Generous, Prosperous
Origin: Japan

Gender: Buck
Race: Lapaki, Hare

Role: Blacksmith - He makes weapons, cart repairs and general iron-work repairs.

Personality:
Hiroshi is a honest Lapaki, a little to honest sometimes and can say things that could insult people (eg. To a fat person in shop, "So who ate all the pies" looking at them) He can just insult people for fun though, with a sly crooked grin on his face. He hates practical jokes, or being the person joked about.

He has a pretty fair temper, He can even come with being insulted alot before getting his hammer. He does try to be shivelrus defending the weak and the ladies from enemys.

Hiroshi hides his shivelrous side under a sarcastic and insulting cape. He's not fritened by anyone he affends, typicaly laughing at his own insults. He enjoys making other peoples blood boil especily if he didn't like them before they started talking.

He does has a soft spot for children, he enjoys telling them storys of 'the old days' and can be quite generous to them. When it comes to the females even Hiroshi gets stuck not quite knowing how to react. well he'll unsult ugly females like eveyone else, its the pretty ones that stump him, and the ones with children. Its that feeling of 'love' he just doesn't understand.




Description:
Quad: Hiroshi is a rather bulky Hare, his legs aren't very long but very strong. His eyes remain a very bright blue and his claws are a off-white-pink color. His coat is rather rough, short, and a dull gray color with flicks of black and white. His ears are in proportion with his body and a slightly darker gray. His tail is on the small side and is Gray on the top and black on the bottom. His legs and belly are a slightly lighter gray than the rest of his body.


Anthro: Hiroshi still has a slate gray fur all over his body, On the top of his head the hair grows to about 6 inches in length and is a dark gray like his ears. His eyes are a very bright blue, His fingers are rather bulky with short hairs and white-pink fingernails. He remains a large form with strong arm and leg mussels.
He wares a white sleeveless cotton shirt and rough brown trousers. When he's working or ready for work he puts on a heavy brown leather apron. and a matching belt that holds all his tools.

Worship: Apollomiestro

Skills: Metalwork, ingenuity

Weaknesses: Not very agile, pretty cynical, give up way to easy

Weapons: A Blacksmiths Hammer


Additional Forms: N/A

Mate/Wife/Wives/Husband: N/A

[Captain Stumpy]

okay what needs changing?

[Pyro]

There aren't grammar issues so much as substance issues. There really could be more about him. Personality wise he's pretty flat. His personality is one of those general things that makes him seem more like an NPC than an actual character. As well, it seems to be all over the place. you can't really anger him, yet you can? And when he is angered he's a hothead? If he's a peacable sort, he's a peaceful sort. His anger probably wouldn't be as big or violent.

What you have so far makes me think of a crotchety ol' man with lots of good stories to tell. Perhaps you can build on the vibe you've already created to make it a bit more descriptive? :3

[Captain Stumpy]

I wrote a little, but the blacksmith job okay? and the blue eye, i tryed my best but it still looks really fake, and angry